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Camila Greene 2. An Approved Topic: Religion is an important part of the lives of people of Waknuk, but it is abused and manipulated in very unreligious ways.

Thesis: In T//he Chrysalids,// the people of Waknuk abuse religion by redefining the messages found in the Bible. (great thesis)

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In many societies there are different factors that bring a community together, such as: culture, language, religion, and similar lifestyles. However, when societies use religion to bring them together as a society, they can abuse it. For example, in Christianity the messages given through the Bible are at times misinterpreted and abused. The abuses of religion are well shown in everyday scenarios and even books. A good example of this is in the book written by John Wyndham called T//he Chrysalids//. In //the Chrysalids//, the people of Waknuk abuse religion by redefining the messages found in the Bible.

The people of Waknuk treat the deviations like dirt. The deviations are tortured and sent to the "Fringes". There was even a time where the deviational children were burned, just because of their differences. Even from a non-religious point of view, this is no way to treat another human being, even though the people of Waknuk didn't exactly consider the deviations human. To hurt one another for simple differences, such as blemishes of the skin, is unacceptable. From a christian) point of view you are to treat people as you would like them to treat you, according to Mathew in the Bible: Matthew 7:12:“So whatever you wish that others would do to you, do also to them, for this is the Law and the Prophets." The people of Waknuk, or anybody in general, would not appreciate being discriminated against in a violent and unjust way. So if the people of Waknuk are so religious, why do they not obey this law? if the Bible says to treat others the way they would want to be treated, wouldnt the people of Waknuk want to be treated humanely? then wouldn't they, by following the Bible's message, need to treat the deviations as equals? In the //Chrysalids,// there are many ways the people of Waknuk punished the deviations; the most devastating one was burning the newborns as well as whoever gave birth to this deviation would be whipped for it, as Old man Jacob said : "When my father was a young man a woman who bore a child that wasn't in the image was whipped for it. if she bore three out of the image she was uncertified, outlawed, and sold. It made them careful about their purity and their prayers. My father reckoned there was a lot less trouble with mutants on account of it, and when there were any, they were burnt, like other deviations."

It is said that we are alll children of God. It was never said that there are requirements to be a child of God, so even those with an extra arm, or an unusual blemish of the skin are infact also considered a child of God. Deuteronomy 14:1: "You are all the children of the LORD your God." This perfect human image that was put into the heads of the people of Waknuk is not at all what was said in their Religion. They have in fact altered their religion and made it into what they believed in, the perfect human image. Although, in doing this they have redefined what God truly desired(wanted). "Not until i had reached the bank and was making my homeward way along the top of it did the monotonous Sunday precepts join up with reality. Then they did it with a click that was almost audible. The Definition of Man recited itself in my head: '...and each leg shall be jointed twice and have one foot, and each foot five toes, and each toe shall end with a flat nail...' And so on, until finally: 'And any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. it is neither man nor woman. It is a blasphemy agaiunst the true Image of God, and hateful in the sigh of God." This young boy, David, has this "Definition of Man" reciting itself in his head, at such a young age kids are given this wrong information that they grow up with. It was never said that man should have two legs that are jointed twice to be truly a man, as all are children of God, and everyone is the same in his eyes.

Although it is clear to our sight that there are many differences between one another, this vision is not shared with God. It is said that we are all the same in his eyes, and are loved euqually in Galatians 3:28: "There is neither Jew nor Greek, slave nor free, male nor female, for you are all one in the Christ Jesus. So if it is said that there is no difference between Jews and Greek, slave and free, male and female, then there should be no difference between deviational and normal. The people of Waknuk shoiuld see everyone as equal, the way God does. It is said in the Definition of Man that "any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. It is neither man nor woman. It is a blasphemy against the true image of God, and hateful in the sight of God." How could that be true if in the sight of God we are all the same? There cannot be hate towards differences if one cannot see them. It is for your actions that you should be seen as hateful in the sight of God, not apperance.

In conclusion, the people of waknuk do indeed abuse they're religion. They believe to follow the words of God, when truly they have altered them so it goes against all people they thought to be deviational. Only taking elements of God's words and adding your own isn't infact following the religion or at all what God wished. 6. Peer Comments: -Hathan , -Melo, -Omid. 7. Good Copy in MLA format

Camila Greene Mr. Ahumada ENG D2-P4 April 12th, 2010 =__ Religion is abused and altered in the town of Waknuk __ = In many societies, there are different factors that bring a community together, such as, culture, language, religion, and similar lifestyles. However, when societies use religion to bring them together as a society, they can abuse it. For example, in Christianity the messages given through the Bible are at times misinterpreted and abused. The abuses of religion are well shown in everyday scenarios and even books. A good example of this is in the book written by John Wyndham called T//he Chrysalids//. In //the Chrysalids//, the people of Waknuk abuse religion by redefining the messages found in the Bible.

The people of Waknuk treat the deviations like dirt. The deviations are tortured and sent to the "Fringes". There was even a time when the deviational children were burned, just because of their differences. Even from a non-religious point of view, this is no way to treat another human being, even though the people of Waknuk didn't exactly consider the deviations human. To hurt one another for simple differences, such as blemishes of the skin or abnormal body form, is unacceptable.

Greene 2  From a Christian point of view you are to treat people as you would like them to treat you. According to Mathew as quoted in the Bible: Matthew 7:12:“So whatever you wish that others would do to you do also to them, for this is the Law and the Prophets." The people of Waknuk, or anybody in general, would not appreciate being discriminated against in a violent and unjust way. So if the people of Waknuk are so religious, why do they not obey this law? If the Bible says to treat others the way they would want to be treated, wouldn’t the people of Waknuk want to be treated humanely? Wouldn't they, by following God’s words as stated in the Bible, need to treat the deviations as equals? In // the //Chrysalids, there are many ways the people of Waknuk punished the deviations; the most devastating one was burning the newborns. Whoever gave birth to a deviation would be whipped for it, as Old man Jacob said: "When my father was a young man a woman who bore a child that wasn't in the image was whipped for it. If she bore three out of the image she was uncertified, outlawed, and sold. It made them careful about their purity and their prayers. My father reckoned there was a lot less trouble with mutants on account of it, and when there were any, they were burnt, like other deviations." To think that someone was tortured and murdered because they did not fit this perfect human image that the people of Waknuk had put through their heads.

It is said that we are all children of God. It was never said that there are requirements to be a child of God, so even those with an extra arm or an unusual blemish of the skin are in fact also considered a child of God in his eyes, (Deuteronomy 14:1): "You are all the children of the LORD your God." This perfect human image that was put into the heads of the people of Greene 3 <span style="background-attachment: initial; background-clip: initial; background-color: white; background-image: initial; background-origin: initial; background-position: initial initial; background-repeat: initial initial; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 200%;">Waknuk was not at all what was said in their Religion. They had in fact altered their religion and made it into what they believed in, the perfect human image. In doing this, they have redefined what God truly wanted. Even children are going on reciting the Human Image, "Not until I had reached the bank and was making my homeward way along the top of it did the monotonous Sunday precepts join up with reality. Then they did it with a click that was almost audible. The Definition of Man recited itself in my head: '...and each leg shall be jointed twice and have one foot, and each foot five toes, and each toe shall end with a flat nail...' And so on, until finally: 'And any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. It is neither man nor woman. It is a blasphemy against the true Image of God, and hateful in the sigh of God." This young boy, David, had this "Definition of Man", reciting itself in his head. At such a young age kids are given this wrong information that they grow up with. It was never said that man should have two legs that are jointed twice to be truly a man, as we all are children of God, and everyone is the same in his eyes.

It is clear to our sight that there are many differences between one another. However, this vision is not shared with God. Galatians 3:28: It is said that we are all the same in his eyes, and are all one in the Lord Jesus Christ in "There is neither Jew nor Greek, slave nor free, male nor female, for you are all one in the Christ Jesus.” So if it is said that there is no difference between Jews <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 10pt; line-height: 200%; text-align: right;">Greene 4

and Greek, slave and free, male and female, then there should be no difference between deviational and normal. The people of Waknuk should see everyone as equal, the way God does. It is said in the Definition of Man that "any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. It is neither man nor woman. It is a blasphemy against the true image of God, and hateful in the sight of God." How could that be true if in the sight of God we are all the same? There cannot be hate towards differences if one cannot see them. It is for your actions that you should be seen as hateful in the sight of God, not for your appearance. The people of Waknuk added this whole new idea to the religion that there is a “perfect image”, and that there is a difference between one another, differences that actually classifies people if you are to be considered human.

In conclusion, the people of Waknuk do indeed abuse their religion. They believe they follow the words of God, when truly they have altered them to the extent that they work against all people they thought to be deviational. Taking only some elements of God's words and adding your own isn't in fact following the religion, or what God wished for all.

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