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__**John Buhain**__

Can the people of Waknuk be forgiven for their horrible behaviour? Defend or prosecute them

The people in Waknuk should not be forgiven for their behaviour towards those who are different because their ignorance and their actions were too horibble to be forgiven. (this thesis is workable. Please find evidence to support your claim

Rough intro: There have been many incidents ﻿in which people have been mistreated by others. These people did not deserve this cruel treatment. In the Chrysalids, the citizens of a town called Waknuk are punished for not fitting the "norm" criteria, naming them Deviations.Punishments were so inexorable, Petra, Rosalind, and even David, the son of the most religious man in Waknuk, fled to the Fringes. Their traditions that they have chosen for deviations were inhuman. ( expand) (what does this sentence mean?). The standard that Waknuk accumulates to is so absolute, that even people with the slightest difference will be killed off. So should the people of Waknuk be forgiven for their actions? Think again, the people in Waknuk should not be forgiven for their behavior towards those who are different because their actions were too horrible to be forgiven. great edits Sarah

Paragraph 1: Waknuk is a society that is strictly religous, living closely along with the Bible, but how they are following the word of God is very incorrect. They say that "And any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. It is niether man or women. It is a blasphemy against the true Image of God, and hatefull in the sight of God." yet in the Bible it also says God created eveyone in his image, and i doubt God wants to be hateful to himself. 4. Essay Outline 5. First Draft of your Essay 6. Peer Comments

Victoria Jordana Sarah

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 * Peer Comments:**

Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph
 * 1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis?**
 * 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?**

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs
 * 1.How well are the quotations integrated and analysed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters?**
 * 2.****How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?**

Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph
 * 1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary.**
 * 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending?**
 * 3.****How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?**